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Come from the clouds...

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Eyes towards the clouds on the invisible horizon
You glide past
Without noticing the notice you cause

A sad, yet loving stare,
The simplest things obtain.
One glance
Could cause the most random happiness.

What do you think one word could do?
I'm deliberately trying to break my habbit of "I.." "...I"... or in other words, stopping with the self centered poetry... I tried hard.. I hoped it worked.
© 2008 - 2024 Chikami-chan
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h-l-t's avatar
i think it works. The lack of 1st person definatly adds a different effect, which I really like